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考研英语作文:疯狂背诵30篇(23)

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Direction 23

Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the picture;
2. interpret the meaning of the picture;
3. make your comments.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

审题:

这道题的出题方式我们已遇到多次了,是“描述图画+阐释含义+作出评论”的模式,这种模式在写作中的灵活程度比较大。

Sample:

In the picture, a young man asks an old man, “What can be got without pains in this world?” The old man replies, “There is only one thing: poverty.”

Looking at the drawing, I think a lot. It tells us that we have to make strenuous efforts whenever we want to be successful in a particular field. How can a person achieve his ultimate goal without longtime practices and continuous attempts?

A good case in point is mountaineering. Nobody is born a good mountain climber, and one can only become a skilled one after countless injuries. The scenery at the mountaintop is fantastic, but the road to the summit is always rough and full of hardships and dangers. Isn’t scientific research the same? Countless sleepless nights, thousands of failures and even more—all of these are part of a scientist’s life. Only a few of them can make great scientific breakthroughs, and all of these people are the most persevering.

On the contrary, if a person is determined to live an idle life, and wait for God to put something in his hands, then that thing should and could only be poverty. If a person has neither ideal nor the determination to live better and let others live better, his existence is not meaningful at all.

点评:

这篇文章共分四段:首段是描述图画;次段是总结寓意;第三段是举例说明;第四段是下结论。该文最引人注目之处是第三个段落,整段举了两个例子。我们在多年的考研阅卷中发现,大多数同学的举例是不成功的。举例子要具备两个条件才能成功,一是典型——既要紧扣主题,又要具有代表性,能够震撼人心,切忌不痛不痒;二是精练——用简洁的话语表达深刻的意义,切忌拖泥带水。本文第三段在这点上很值得学习。
文章第一段非常简洁。第二段的首句是过渡性的句子,次句直接对图画的意义做出总结——无论我们想在哪个领域获得成功,都必须付出艰辛的努力。接着采用了语气非常强烈的反问句——没有长时间的实践和不断的努力,一个人又怎能实现最终的目标?第三段包括了两个例子,一个是登山,一个是科学研究。第四段是结尾段落,首先与第三段是相对的,其次又呼应了文章的首段,非常精妙。该段共有两句话,第一句话说如果一个人下定决心要过闲散的生活,等着上天在他手中放上某样东西,那么这样东西就只能是贫穷。第二句话进一步说,如果一个人既没有理想也没有决心让自己和别人过得更好,那么他的存在就失去了意义。第二句话与第一句采用了同样的句式,语气却更加强烈,给人留下了很深刻的印象。该段第一句话中的should and could be...是一个高级用法,意思是“将会是而且只能是”。

心得:

我们重点来看一下举例的段落,即第三段。该段共有六句话。第一句话引出了登山。第二句话是一个经典句子,没有人生来就是一个好的登山者,一个人只有在无数伤痛后才能成长起来——该句的内在逻辑联系非常强。第三句话说山顶的风光绮丽,但通往顶点的路却充满艰辛(句中有平行名词的用法)。第四句话采用反问句巧妙过渡到科学研究上来。第五句先用平行的名词词组,而后在破折号后写道“所有这些都是科学家生活的一部分”相当独特。注意句中part一定不要加冠词。最后一句写道,他们中只有一小部分人能取得重大的科学突破,而这些人又都是最坚忍之人。
请大家仔细学习这一段落。一是该段的构建方法,看句子与句子是怎样有机结合,层层推进,构成一个理想的段落的。二是学习本段的举例方法。例子是用来说明道理的,如果能说到点子上,说得透彻,就一定能服人。
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