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GRE作文得分点主要在哪儿

1. 逻辑混乱。

2.过于主观。

3.中式思维/表达。

4.过分注重用词。

具体分析:

一、逻辑问题:

大体上来说,同学们的逻辑问题是最多的。逻辑问题有三种,通篇逻辑,段落之间,段落之中。

其实这可能和我们高中初中的英语教育有关系,大家都很喜欢一条一条摆原因。Firstly, secondly...然后后面至于这个ly后面是什么就不管了,一顿胡扯。也不管这段落与段落之间的衔接是否自然,反正都有什么ly给打头阵。

事实上,中西方的思维总是存在差异,很多时候看管老师们都不懂考生在说什么。考官很困惑,这个例子和这个有关系吗?为什么前面在说A,后面突然B了?

二、整体观念:

和结论什么关系?要记住一点,GRE作文文章是一个整体,你的开篇结尾和中部内容都是应该有关联的。也就是说,在开头提到的,文中应该有展开,同时在结尾有总结。中文里不也要求行文流畅么,这至少得要求逻辑是通顺的。

三、能力要求:

很多同学都很喜欢写中立观点“A不错,但不够好”,这虽然看起来很客观,但实际上这种GRE作文对逻辑的要求非常高,要怎样去组织语言,组织相应的论据论点,非常考验人。

有同学想说A事件要瑕疵互见,但是写着写着就乱七八糟,东一块西一块,不知道在讲点什么了。更有厉害的索性冗长的2000来词,讲了个空话。所以建议刚上手的同学,还是选择一边倒,站定脚跟不放松。即便是真的要写中立观点,实际上也都在A和B之间有所偏好。

四、内容空洞:

此外,现在很多人会要求练writing的时候先写提纲。于是同学们们就只写一个观点,然后后面的例子乱用,或者根本没有弄清楚什么是例子。事实上,这种展开,可以是实例,也可以是虚拟的假设。实例中往往分自己的经验和他人的经验。那么怎样的例子有说服力呢?

一般来说是:名人名事(知名度大)> 众人众事(样本大)>自己经历(体会深)>他人经历。假设往往不够有说服力,因为很难涉及到每一个变量。但是假设在有的时候可以行得通,就是在很难说清楚步骤和因果关系的时候,用一个假设场景来推导会让文章变得浅显易懂。

所以建议,在刚开始上手写GRE作文的时候,先不要给自己30分钟的压力,先列出提纲(10分钟),再用30分钟去写,看能写多少。

五、选材准确:

记住你的举例一定要死死扣住你的GRE作文观点,不要是和观点打擦边球的。比如我改过之前一个小朋友的文章,她的大观点是电脑对学生来说是有益的,小观点是,可以查到很多资料,然后例子是可以用google查到很多资料,很快捷。

ok,乍一看这个没有问题。但是实际上问题大了,用goole查到很多资料,是因为电脑还是internet?这很容易就偏题了,变成internet 对学生来说是有益的。例子一定要从论点出发,再回到论点。不要将你的论点发散,后果很可能就是越写越跑题。所以每次写好一篇文章,都看看,论据里的key words是不是和论点里的key words 一样,论点里的key words又是不是和题目里的key words一样。你的key words 可以比大题里的key words更加narrow,但是千万不要更加广泛。

逻辑错误是GRE作文段落中逻辑比较容易错的。一般是对接续词的运用。如However, thus, therefore,他们决定了上下文之间的关系,但是很多读起来就很奇怪,两者完全不是转折的关系,用了however,就会让人觉得有些无厘头。或者就是上下文之间完全没有逻辑联系,就是两个单句凑在了一起。还是这句话,一篇文章和流水似的,不能断。中间断了那就不叫好文章了。即使前一句与有一句没有接续词,它们在逻辑上也是要能承接的。想要去的GRE写作满分,则一定要在逻辑上完美无缺。

GRE issue写作优秀实例:多媒体教育

题目:

Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.

尽管诸如电视、电脑和互联网这样的发明似乎给学校教育提供了进步的手段,但是所有这些技术往往也是在偏离真正的学习。

正文:

Nowadays there is a growing concern about the role that innovations have played in the field of learning. While most people think that innovations benefit learning process in various ways, different opinions arise that these technology advancements actually distract students from real learning. On balance, according to my personal observation,whether innovations can be beneficial or detrimental to real learning depends on the students and the teachers, not on these innovations themselves.

To begin with, technological innovations do help teaching and learning in various ways.With the aid of these technologies, the process of teaching and learning can be shorter and easier than before. For instance, if a student want certain published papers of an academic discipline, he/she may look through considerable catalogs to find the ones he/she needs. However, with the help of Internet innovation, at present most of these papers are published online. Consequently, to find certain paper the procedure is much easier and shorter, the students just type the key words and other information of the paper, and then the system will search the database, and the papers are there waiting for them. As this new approach can save a lot of time for the students, he/she could have more time reading the papers and absorbing the knowledge rather than checking and looking for the papers that could be a waste of his/her time. This example aptly illustrates how technology advancement benefited the students and their learning process.

Secondly, while innovations can help learning in various ways, it is more important that the central role of the pursuit for knowledge and wisdoms are maintained. What real matters is not the approach but the purpose of learning. In India, where modern technologies are less applied to the learning process than in the US and other developed countries, still a lot of distinguished students achieved their academic goal with their hard work and desires to knowledge. In the US, where the software engineering students are given the most advanced facilities and apparatus for their learning and research, however, it is wildly accepted that they are far less outstanding compared to the Indian students of software, who may share computers in groups. From this comparison we can see that the real and core push of learning is the desire for knowledge, not the help of innovations.

In addition, if not guided properly, the technology advancement might inhibit learning.In other words, innovation can distract the students from real learning than helping them. It is obvious that a computer can help students of science to calculate mathematical equations but can also be used for recreation such as net surfing or computer games. It is highly possible that these students can spend more time and energy on recreations rather than learning when using a computer. Thus, learning is inhibited. Under this circumstance, guidance and restrictions are needed to ensure the right use of innovations for learning, or the consequence may be on the contrary to the students and teachers' desire.

To conclude, technological innovations are beneficial to learning in many ways, but when using these technologies, one should not forget the real purpose of learning and remember not to be distracted for other usages of these innovations that are irrelevant or detrimental to learning. On balance, innovation here serves as a double-edges sword, and its right use is dependent on the students and the teachers.

GRE issue写作优秀实例:忠诚

题目:

Most people are taught that loyalty is a virtue. But loyalty-whether to one's friends, to one's school or place of employment, or to any institution-is all too often a destructive rather than a positive force.

大多数人被告知忠诚是一种美德。但是无论是对朋友、对学校、对单位还是对任何机构,忠诚时常都是弊大于利的。

正文:

I disagree with the author for he has confused the faithfulness with the misguided or overextended loyalty. In fact, loyalty does be a cherished virtue that should be given enough emphasis.

Loyalty, a kind of lasting persistence and its precondition is that the subject of fidelity is worthy of such strong emotion. In each society, loyalty is a indispensable and vital part of the system of morality. No matter in schools, at home or at work, first midst and last, people accept a similar education that as an individual, he or she should first have a sense of ligeance, that is work for the whole. Of course, the subjects of loyalty are various including scientific theory, friends, family, schools, places of employment and the nation. A vivid example can lend support to the statement is the heroical astronomer - Bronow, who advanced Copernicus' theory that the earth and other planets revolve around the sun, enraged the Roma church that held the Ptolemaic system of astronomy and was burnt to death just because he refused to give up his scientific theory. It is the lasting loyalty toward truth that lead Bronow to sacrifice himself. And people all respect such duteous spirit. However, without loyalty, the morality of a society will deteriorate into apathy desert and everyone just lives for him /herself, that is to say, no one is willing to pay loyalty to the whole, then finally the human civilization will fall apart.

However, on the other hand, the fidelity should not be confused with misguided or overextended loyalty and the latter is all too often a destructive rather than a positive force. People all hold that mutual loyalty between friends is the basis of lasting friendship. But people should also realize that true loyalty and authentic responsibility for a friend are not only always believing him or her unconditionally but also persuading, helping and even impeaching him or her when him or her has committed serious mistakes or even crimes. Of course, when facing up to such painful dilemma, each one will hesitate because he or she is afraid of being censured to betray his or her friend and some one may choose to keep slient in order to insist of the so-called loyalty.

In fact, such behavior may prevent his or her friend from taking right actions. The same to a school, a family, a company even the nation, when the subject that people once string along with no longer deserves loyalty, people should resolutely choose to be loyal to the truth, the justice and the humanity. That calls for people are always alert to what they think right and what they think wrong, via doing so, people can change their mind for right choice on time.

To sum up, people should insist on true loyalty, and always avoid being the victim of the misguided or overextended loyalty. In the world, there is nothing that can be always absolutely right or wrong and changing happens all the time. So people should always hold deep insight to discern what deserves their loyalty and what does not.

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